Official Critiques wanted post.

Posted March 1st, 2011 by quakerninja

Do post shirts you want to have fixed.
Don't post shirts that took you no time or thought.

I can't help you if you have no understanding of what I am going to tell you.
Please have a basic understanding of the fundamentals and a willingness to accept criticism and the self motivation to take that information and improve yourself.

This is not a post to do your work for you and they are just opinions so please don't get butt hurt.
Also share and share alike please. No leaches. If you have something of value to add don't clam up we all have things we are really good at and things that we suck at.

Do describe what you are trying to get across and what you think the problem might be in your own words. I can't read your mind.
Don't just flood this place with crap and expect to get better. Your going to have to do all the hard parts on your own. All I can do is point out some technical mistakes and suggest improvements.

3578 Comments

jamelbeckham said about 10 months ago

I wanted this idea to stay simple, any feedback would be great, thanks.
Melgar said about 10 months ago

Denimous Snake said:For starters, why are those webs important to the design exactly?

Well, just like your WATER DROP logo same is the unnecessity of the web. Com'on man,where am i suppose to learn from that comment. tsk.
bleet said about 10 months ago

jamelbeckham said:I wanted this idea to stay simple, any feedback would be great, thanks.

there are so many things wrong with this, spacing, leading, alignment
Anthony Smith said about 10 months ago

Melgar said:
Denimous Snake said:For starters, why are those webs important to the design exactly?

Well, just like your WATER DROP logo same is the unnecessity of the web. Com'on man,where am i suppose to learn from that comment. tsk.

Responses like these are why so few actually want to critique others on this site. If you had taken the time to actually consider his criticism instead of throwing a mini tantrum, you'd hopefully realise that he raises a solid point that applies to most of your design. It is nonsensical. An ill-considered mash up of elements that hold little to no relevance to one another. These faults are mirrored on a technical level too. Id chime in my opinion on that too but I assume your response will be the same as before.
jamelbeckham said about 10 months ago

I tried my best with the kerning what exactly is wrong with the spacing and alignment I'm going to do my own
searching as always but a little more detail in whats wrong would help thanks.

bleet said:
jamelbeckham said:I wanted this idea to stay simple, any feedback would be great, thanks.

there are so many things wrong with this, spacing, leading, alignment
Matt Borchert said about 10 months ago

jamelbeckham said:I tried my best with the kerning what exactly is wrong with the spacing and alignment I'm going to do my own
searching as always but a little more detail in whats wrong would help thanks.

bleet said:
jamelbeckham said:I wanted this idea to stay simple, any feedback would be great, thanks.

there are so many things wrong with this, spacing, leading, alignment

You should really consider investing in some typography books, and always work on a grid. The spacing and the way things line up is just all over the place. The underline under EMPTY LYRICS ends way too soon on the S, the type below is is spaced randomly and extends past the words EMPTY LYRICS...look how much spacing the word OR has compared to the rest of the sentence... If you want to do "simple" typographic designs, the typography really has to be perfect. It's really not something you can just look up online, you have to have an understanding of the rules of typography and how to apply them to what you're doing.
Melgar said about 10 months ago

Anthony Smith said:
Melgar said:
Denimous Snake said:For starters, why are those webs important to the design exactly?

Well, just like your WATER DROP logo same is the unnecessity of the web. Com'on man,where am i suppose to learn from that comment. tsk.

Responses like these are why so few actually want to critique others on this site. If you had taken the time to actually consider his criticism instead of throwing a mini tantrum, you'd hopefully realise that he raises a solid point that applies to most of your design. It is nonsensical. An ill-considered mash up of elements that hold little to no relevance to one another. These faults are mirrored on a technical level too. Id chime in my opinion on that too but I assume your response will be the same as before.

Totally respect this man. And thanks. Point taken. Will rearrange everything.

I also had a feedback about the lighting on this but did he didn't really elaborated, any pointers? lining? (Other than the web-thing)
jungdynamischsylt said about 9 months ago

Hey everybody. I am totally not sure about this one. It has all the Stuff in it i wanted but still, its not striking me. Feel kind of lost on this one. Maybe just drop it and move to another idea?

Thanks in advance.

Thomas
Yudha Lu said about 9 months ago

This one is rejected, I think I need suggestions and critics from you guys.
Thanks!
cityhall said about 9 months ago

jamelbeckham said:I wanted this idea to stay simple, any feedback would be great, thanks.

Also "Empty Lyrics" is a noun yet the definition or whatever you have underneath is describing an adjective.
jamelbeckham said about 9 months ago

cityhall said:
jamelbeckham said:I wanted this idea to stay simple, any feedback would be great, thanks.

Also "Empty Lyrics" is a noun yet the definition or whatever you have underneath is describing an adjective.

wow, thanks, I didn't even think about that, i will definitely go back to the drawing board with this, i'll probably just take out that little definition, and just leave it as empty lyrics. Thanks for the advice man
JoeWSE said about 9 months ago

jungdynamischsylt said:Hey everybody. I am totally not sure about this one. It has all the Stuff in it i wanted but still, its not striking me. Feel kind of lost on this one. Maybe just drop it and move to another idea?

Thanks in advance.

Thomas

hey man first ting to say, this is amazing, really impressive stuff. I dont think its over powering but its definitely a piece you'll turn your head to. Although I think the top right hand arrow needs shifting a little to the right. seems to throw the balance off a little, but apart from that I really like this
JoeWSE said about 9 months ago

hey people give me some comments please :)

thanks
JoeWSE said about 9 months ago

Yudha Lu said:This one is rejected, I think I need suggestions and critics from you guys.
Thanks!

too much background which doesnt cut through, just too bland, needs more to it.
bleet said about 9 months ago

jungdynamischsylt said:Hey everybody. I am totally not sure about this one. It has all the Stuff in it i wanted but still, its not striking me. Feel kind of lost on this one. Maybe just drop it and move to another idea?

Thanks in advance.

Thomas

this is epic, u could get it through as is, but i love the detailing around the eye, maybe add some detailing on other aspects and you have a winner. Would be great as is on a white t, or dark grey on a heather grey T. An idea is having this as a back print and something smaller on the front. " the hunt" with the eye on front and this on back
jungdynamischsylt said about 9 months ago

Thanks bleet and JoeWSE for the Feedback!

I think i´ll keep it in the desk for some more days and then will go back to it.

muchas gracias

thomas
JoeWSE said about 9 months ago

jungdynamischsylt said:Thanks bleet and JoeWSE for the Feedback!

I think i´ll keep it in the desk for some more days and then will go back to it.

muchas gracias

thomas

great stuff, would you mind giving me a few comments on my piece?
jungdynamischsylt said about 9 months ago

JoeWSE said:

hey people give me some comments please :)

thanks

I really like the concept of it. Pretty iconic scene :) Maybe you could extend the elements a little bit over the rope, like some water splashing over it, part of the clouds and maybe a tentacle? And maybe add some texture to it to give it more depth.

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Anthony Smith said about 9 months ago

JoeWSE said:

hey people give me some comments please :)

thanks

Lots of good things going on in this piece. However, I think the composition is very static, and it leaves the overal illustration looking restrained, and alot less interesting than it could have been. You touch on a nice idea having the mast (?) and the tentacle overlapping the frame. But the execution is barely noticeable and adds to this timid approach I think youve taken. That boat could be shooting outside of the frame. The sea could be rolling up to the very top and those tentacles could have wrapped their way around the rope. So many different ways this design could have been more dynamic, more active and generally more exciting to look at.

Changing these observations would probably need you to start from scratch, so I think its best to keep it in mind for your next design and really let loose.
freak monkey said about 9 months ago

hi sir,
my design is rejected, i need critiques thx...
Brainlordprints said about 9 months ago

This was denied, I was just wondering what I could do to make it better and where I could improve. Thanks everyone.
WinterArtwork said about 10 months ago

can you tell what this is?
Somaon said about 10 months ago

freak monkey said:hi sir,
my design is rejected, i need critiques thx...

I would say that the first one , the lighting (or color) is off a bit. It seems you have the white over and the blue from under but some parts seem off a bit to me. I could be wrong but that's the thing that stuck out to me. The second one I think is really dope but the steak looks crooked, seems a little off.

Brainlordprints said:

This was denied, I was just wondering what I could do to make it better and where I could improve. Thanks everyone.

I think your lines and shading might need a little improvement.

Hope it helps guys just giving my 2 cents ans learning as well.
Somaon said about 10 months ago

WinterArtwork said:

can you tell what this is?

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Cowboys shooting zombies, but in the city?
freak monkey said about 10 months ago

Somaon said:
freak monkey said:hi sir,
my design is rejected, i need critiques thx...

I would say that the first one , the lighting (or color) is off a bit. It seems you have the white over and the blue from under but some parts seem off a bit to me. I could be wrong but that's the thing that stuck out to me. The second one I think is really dope but the steak looks crooked, seems a little off.

Brainlordprints said:

This was denied, I was just wondering what I could do to make it better and where I could improve. Thanks everyone.

I think your lines and shading might need a little improvement.

Hope it helps guys just giving my 2 cents ans learning as well.

So once thank you very much for your criticism sir helpful, i will fix its
Bedlam77 said about 9 months ago

at winter artwork its a reference to the beatles abby road correct. sorry quotes are not working for me
alexnu said about 9 months ago

hi mintees.i'm new here and i'm a beginner with illustrations.
here is my second attempt .

critiques appreciated
Decappuccino said about 9 months ago

WinterArtwork said:

can you tell what this is?

The Walking Dead :)
alexnu said about 9 months ago

hei again,2nd post here.hopefully someone will give some feedback.

thanks
IgoHardOn said about 9 months ago

Sorry, newbee question, but how do i get my image to show in this thread
Acid said about 9 months ago

Upload it on something like imageshack or tinypic, and post the url.
Serji Gold said about 9 months ago

Somaon said:
WinterArtwork said:

can you tell what this is?

\

Cowboys shooting zombies, but in the city?

Made me laugh.
WinterArtwork said about 10 months ago

Somaon said:
WinterArtwork said:

can you tell what this is?

\

Cowboys shooting zombies, but in the city?

bingo! lol
jamelbeckham said about 10 months ago

Listening to music in hi-fi is the only way to go. High quality crisp sounds really help bring out every small detail in a song, or instrumental, that is why I love hi-fi. Any feedback on the design would be great thanks, and no the vinyl is not a google image.
ChrisNeal said about 9 months ago

So this design didn't make it through, would love to get peoples feedback on what needs improving, cheers guys.
BUTTER'S said about 9 months ago

haven't finished it yet but it seems to be :) whats ur thought? thxs.
cmeyers said about 9 months ago

ChrisNeal said:So this design didn't make it through, would love to get peoples feedback on what needs improving, cheers guys.

if i remember right, the mockup was really rough. the art is cool, just presented poorly i think.
cmeyers said about 9 months ago

BUTTER'S said:haven't finished it yet but it seems to be :) whats ur thought? thxs.

really cool, just a couple things you could tweak. it looks like there are some accidental letters there. like i see a huge L on the right next to the word "of". the d in "round" looks like it could be a g.... things like that.
Anthony Smith said about 9 months ago

cmeyers said:
BUTTER'S said:haven't finished it yet but it seems to be :) whats ur thought? thxs.

really cool, just a couple things you could tweak. it looks like there are some accidental letters there. like i see a huge L on the right next to the word "of". the d in "round" looks like it could be a g.... things like that.

Agreed. At first glance I thought it would be ambigram and forgave the legibility issues that pop up around the composition. But being that its not, id say making the piece readable to be a make or break revision.

That being said, think it will be a lovely design when its finished, nice one!

ChrisNeal said about 9 months ago

cmeyers said:
ChrisNeal said:So this design didn't make it through, would love to get peoples feedback on what needs improving, cheers guys.

if i remember right, the mockup was really rough. the art is cool, just presented poorly i think.

That'll teach me for mocking things up at 3 in the morning, cheers, I've done a new mockup and will be re-adding it to the queue.
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