Official Critiques wanted post.

Posted March 1st, 2011 by quakerninja

Do post shirts you want to have fixed.
Don't post shirts that took you no time or thought.

I can't help you if you have no understanding of what I am going to tell you.
Please have a basic understanding of the fundamentals and a willingness to accept criticism and the self motivation to take that information and improve yourself.

This is not a post to do your work for you and they are just opinions so please don't get butt hurt.
Also share and share alike please. No leaches. If you have something of value to add don't clam up we all have things we are really good at and things that we suck at.

Do describe what you are trying to get across and what you think the problem might be in your own words. I can't read your mind.
Don't just flood this place with crap and expect to get better. Your going to have to do all the hard parts on your own. All I can do is point out some technical mistakes and suggest improvements.

3578 Comments

William Henry said about 11 months ago

Rehmsmeyer said:
aushafman said:

rejected...need more advices...

Both are pretty sweet. Probably rejected because no text.

I know I shouldn't say anything to you because you're trying to help, but do you have any idea what you're talking about? Based on your profile and your comments in this thread, I'd say no. The community appreciates that you want to help, but you're actively giving bad advice to people. You telling someone that their design is great and should just be resubmitted, when its clearly not, isn't helping anyone. Its giving people the wrong impression. They start to ignore the critiques because you say its great when you clearly don't have a strong understanding of design or illustration.
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

William Henry said:
jamelbeckham said:This got rejected, any help would be great, I want to try and sell the artwork eventually, thanks.

I know you're trying to go for a Back To The Future style, but it just isn't there. Either make it look more like the BTTF logo, or try something else because it looks like a bad attempt at a BTTF design.

Do you mean use the actually BTTF colors?
Somaon said about 11 months ago

jamelbeckham said:
William Henry said:
jamelbeckham said:This got rejected, any help would be great, I want to try and sell the artwork eventually, thanks.

I know you're trying to go for a Back To The Future style, but it just isn't there. Either make it look more like the BTTF logo, or try something else because it looks like a bad attempt at a BTTF design.

Do you mean use the actually BTTF colors?

I'm thinking it might be how you use your fonts, that's how I'm taking it. The original lettering has affects like big to small and small to big with " Back To The future". I would say do it backwards. Google it you'll get it.
Craig Robson said about 11 months ago

William Henry said:
Rehmsmeyer said:
aushafman said:

rejected...need more advices...

Both are pretty sweet. Probably rejected because no text.

I know I shouldn't say anything to you because you're trying to help, but do you have any idea what you're talking about? Based on your profile and your comments in this thread, I'd say no. The community appreciates that you want to help, but you're actively giving bad advice to people. You telling someone that their design is great and should just be resubmitted, when its clearly not, isn't helping anyone. Its giving people the wrong impression. They start to ignore the critiques because you say its great when you clearly don't have a strong understanding of design or illustration.

seems to be the case a lot in here, one person says "oh its great" and then the artist feels like the whole community thinks it shouldnt have been rejected. listen to half of what you hear and none of what you read.
aushafman said about 11 months ago

so ... what should i do? ... as i know, if my image is rejected, it means it's not yet meet the standards in mintees, for that i need more advices for my pictures, so i can learn to achieve the standards mintees
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

Somaon said:
jamelbeckham said:
William Henry said:
jamelbeckham said:This got rejected, any help would be great, I want to try and sell the artwork eventually, thanks.

I know you're trying to go for a Back To The Future style, but it just isn't there. Either make it look more like the BTTF logo, or try something else because it looks like a bad attempt at a BTTF design.

Do you mean use the actually BTTF colors?

I'm thinking it might be how you use your fonts, that's how I'm taking it. The original lettering has affects like big to small and small to big with " Back To The future". I would say do it backwards. Google it you'll get it.

Thanks for the advice i'll try and mess around with the font some more.
ENDOR said about 11 months ago

ENDOR said:Hey everybody,

this tee just got rejected and I was wondering if anybody could give me some feedback on this? I mean in a way of constructive criticism because I feel like it's one of the better designs I've done recently. I'm looking forward to your feedback. Thanks in advance. Seb.

Official critique wanted ;) Please.
deadoctopi said about 11 months ago

aushafman said:

rejected...need more advices...

I feel like the textures inside the circle are either a) unnecessary, or b) need to extend a bit beyond the edges of the design to look more like a background instead of a circle fill. Or, maybe have some textures over the entire design -barely- bite into it (to preserve the linework) and just nix the background altogether.

I think one of the main hurdles (and I'm not anyone who has an authoritative voice on this stuff, just surmising) is that when someone's stuff isn't accepted, they immediately ask exactly what they need to do, instead of just trying a few different angles. It always seems to be "This got rejected, what do I do?" And I would totally like to read more "This got rejected, here's a few other directions/tweaks I made, any crits on these?"

So we all know you're trying, instead of just waiting on it.
I dunno. Just two cents.

Good luck.
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

I have tried to get this accepted and it keeps getting denied, I have tried multiple things with this artwork, from the typeface to changing the vinyl lines, and textures, etc. I honestly can not figure out what I am doing wrong. This is what mintees is saying what is wrong with the artwork.

Designs are approved by the Mintees curators and may be denied based on one of the following reasons...
- The tee artwork is not deemed strong enough, by the subjective opinion of the Mintees curators.
- The presentation image is blurry or not mocked to the proper size.
- The presentation image does not include a mock up of your design on a tee.
- The design includes obscene or offensive material.
- The design is not your original work.

Any advice on how to get artwork accepted here would be great, thanks.
WXGFX said about 11 months ago

xic said:
WXGFX said:This is what I've been up to. Thoughts anyone?

auto vectoring sucks man, just take ya time vectoring it piece by piece and maybe some colour would do. As for the concept its really abstact to me

Made quite a few changes here and submitted it but alas i brings me deep sorrow to say it has been rejected. Any thoughts and criticisms i could get on this to help me improve it would be great! (Its NOT vector or auto vector)
WXGFX said about 11 months ago

@Jamelbeckham

It sounds like you're having similar issues to me on this one. I'll be honest i'm doubtful that they have issues with the mock up/presentation or the content (Because that all seems fine to me). It seems likely that they don't see you're artwork as being up to scratch (which is not to say that i dont, sucks but they do openly state its subjective), so far i've been applying the logic that if i keep making art that i like and that others like then eventually Mintees will like it too..
I'm not sure that this can really be considered advice but the jist of what i'm saying is 'Keep at it!'
Rehmsmeyer said about 11 months ago

William Henry said:
Rehmsmeyer said:
aushafman said:

rejected...need more advices...

Both are pretty sweet. Probably rejected because no text.

I know I shouldn't say anything to you because you're trying to help, but do you have any idea what you're talking about? Based on your profile and your comments in this thread, I'd say no. The community appreciates that you want to help, but you're actively giving bad advice to people. You telling someone that their design is great and should just be resubmitted, when its clearly not, isn't helping anyone. Its giving people the wrong impression. They start to ignore the critiques because you say its great when you clearly don't have a strong understanding of design or illustration.

Im'ma need some aloe for these burns.
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

WXGFX said:@Jamelbeckham

It sounds like you're having similar issues to me on this one. I'll be honest i'm doubtful that they have issues with the mock up/presentation or the content (Because that all seems fine to me). It seems likely that they don't see you're artwork as being up to scratch (which is not to say that i dont, sucks but they do openly state its subjective), so far i've been applying the logic that if i keep making art that i like and that others like then eventually Mintees will like it too..
I'm not sure that this can really be considered advice but the jist of what i'm saying is 'Keep at it!'

I will definitely keep doing art that I love, even if mintees doesn't
OmaszDesign said about 11 months ago

Rejected, but why? Any opinions?
Stein Hansen said about 11 months ago

I submitted these two designs recently (these aren't my mockups), and got the good ol' rejection email. The comic style one is sloppy looking, but that is the Major Lazer aesthetic, so maybe that didn't come across. I guess I should just be happy that they were grabbed by the label and being sold.

Any words of advice would be appreciated.
cityhall said about 11 months ago

Stein Hansen said:I submitted these two designs recently (these aren't my mockups), and got the good ol' rejection email. The comic style one is sloppy looking, but that is the Major Lazer aesthetic, so maybe that didn't come across. I guess I should just be happy that they were grabbed by the label and being sold.

Any words of advice would be appreciated.

That top one rocks. I love it so much. I almost forgot about Major Lazer
Portox said about 11 months ago

I know this is about 5 years late but this was for a client. Crit away!

WIP - adding a DJ deck and the bat signal.
Ruddy Nora said about 11 months ago

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Stein Hansen said about 11 months ago

cityhall said:
Stein Hansen said:I submitted these two designs recently (these aren't my mockups), and got the good ol' rejection email. The comic style one is sloppy looking, but that is the Major Lazer aesthetic, so maybe that didn't come across. I guess I should just be happy that they were grabbed by the label and being sold.

Any words of advice would be appreciated.

That top one rocks. I love it so much. I almost forgot about Major Lazer

Appreciate it man. Apparently the mods didn't agree.
Johnny Keko said about 11 months ago

Stein Hansen said:I submitted these two designs recently (these aren't my mockups), and got the good ol' rejection email. The comic style one is sloppy looking, but that is the Major Lazer aesthetic, so maybe that didn't come across. I guess I should just be happy that they were grabbed by the label and being sold.

Any words of advice would be appreciated.

Take my comment with a grain of salt cause I'm not entitled to give critique and please listen to those that know their stuff but I would totally wear #1. I think that looks killer. it would look great on heather grey as well. If the lower type on #2 (Genuine Article) was way smaller it would look much better in my opinion. The coins look misplaced, maybe it's the linework/weight that's out of balance, compared to the other elements. Again, take my comment lightly and listen to the others for actual constructive critique.
Stein Hansen said about 11 months ago

I'm down for any critiques. The second design is a parody of wray and nephew jamaican rum:

The drawings on the coins themselves come from characters that are already established for Major Lazer, who has a very defined aesthetic, which is intentionally sloppy and kind of odd. That being said, I feel you, they are very different from the look of the middle part of the illustration. Sizing wise, I didn't have much say in that, they've already been printed.
ANCESTRY said about 11 months ago
Portox said about 11 months ago

Any ideas?
Stein Hansen said about 11 months ago

Portox said:Any ideas?

The records don't follow the perspective of the table at all, also that looks nothing like a mixer that would be set up with turn tables.

Work on the the linework on the joker. The lines on the outside of the shirt should be thicker than the lines defining the wrinkles on the fabric or the creases in the skin. Are you doing this in illustrator?
Portox said about 11 months ago

Stein Hansen said:
Portox said:Any ideas?

The records don't follow the perspective of the table at all, also that looks nothing like a mixer that would be set up with turn tables.

Work on the the linework on the joker. The lines on the outside of the shirt should be thicker than the lines defining the wrinkles on the fabric or the creases in the skin. Are you doing this in illustrator?

Yes using a blob brush. Any tips?
Portox said about 11 months ago
atumclothing said about 11 months ago

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feed back is welcomed
WXGFX said about 11 months ago

WXGFX said:
xic said:
WXGFX said:This is what I've been up to. Thoughts anyone?

auto vectoring sucks man, just take ya time vectoring it piece by piece and maybe some colour would do. As for the concept its really abstact to me

Made quite a few changes here and submitted it but alas i brings me deep sorrow to say it has been rejected. Any thoughts and criticisms i could get on this to help me improve it would be great! (Its NOT vector or auto vector)

Made some more fairly significant changes here, still got rejected. Really would appreciate some input/help with this as I'm not sure where I'm going wrong!

http://i1191.photobucket.com/albums/z474/WXGraphics/TheFatherofMan-1.jpg

P.S Something seems to be up with this thread, it wont accept my image link :(
atumclothing said about 11 months ago

atumclothing said: />

feed back is welcomed

No comments on my first shirt ?
atumclothing said about 11 months ago

aushafman said:

rejected...need more advices...

I don't see anything wrong with this . I like it .
WXGFX said about 11 months ago

@Anthony Smith "The Son of Man is such an iconic Magritte painting I have no idea why anyone would want to take from it and try and pass it as their own, especially when you have kept it so close to the original. Id personally put it aside and leave it."

I wasn't trying to pass it off as my own! I was hoping more to write the next page in the book so to speak. I've always known the painting and liked it but a lot of people I've met haven't even heard of it. I suppose my aim was to more clearly project what the painting means to me as well as to show appreciation.
Thanks for the comment by the way.
Any criticism on the artwork itself?
F.Y.I The link i posted contains an updated version of my design
Anthony Smith said about 11 months ago

I think I worded that wrong, my apologies.

It is such an iconic piece. Your rendition stays too close to the painting for you to be able to call it your own, in my opinion. I honestly do not think youll gain much from taking it further.
Glenn said about 11 months ago

Still a work in progress but I would like to get some feedback on this. Especially the hands, I feel like the thumbs are still a bit funky, thoughts?
xic said about 11 months ago

WXGFX said:@Anthony Smith "The Son of Man is such an iconic Magritte painting I have no idea why anyone would want to take from it and try and pass it as their own, especially when you have kept it so close to the original. Id personally put it aside and leave it."

I wasn't trying to pass it off as my own! I was hoping more to write the next page in the book so to speak. I've always known the painting and liked it but a lot of people I've met haven't even heard of it. I suppose my aim was to more clearly project what the painting means to me as well as to show appreciation.
Thanks for the comment by the way.
Any criticism on the artwork itself?
F.Y.I The link i posted contains an updated version of my design

Can't beleive you man, wtf

You ripping someone's work !!

being inspired doesn't mean to copycat

I feel bad that i thought this was some original work, get your own ideas.
cmeyers said about 11 months ago

xic said:
WXGFX said:@Anthony Smith "The Son of Man is such an iconic Magritte painting I have no idea why anyone would want to take from it and try and pass it as their own, especially when you have kept it so close to the original. Id personally put it aside and leave it."

I wasn't trying to pass it off as my own! I was hoping more to write the next page in the book so to speak. I've always known the painting and liked it but a lot of people I've met haven't even heard of it. I suppose my aim was to more clearly project what the painting means to me as well as to show appreciation.
Thanks for the comment by the way.
Any criticism on the artwork itself?
F.Y.I The link i posted contains an updated version of my design

Can't beleive you man, wtf

You ripping someone's work !!

being inspired doesn't mean to copycat

I feel bad that i thought this was some original work, get your own ideas.

it's an homage. not a rip. nothing wrong with that.

critique the work all day if you want, but this is not a rip.
xic said about 11 months ago

cmeyers said:
xic said:
WXGFX said:@Anthony Smith "The Son of Man is such an iconic Magritte painting I have no idea why anyone would want to take from it and try and pass it as their own, especially when you have kept it so close to the original. Id personally put it aside and leave it."

I wasn't trying to pass it off as my own! I was hoping more to write the next page in the book so to speak. I've always known the painting and liked it but a lot of people I've met haven't even heard of it. I suppose my aim was to more clearly project what the painting means to me as well as to show appreciation.
Thanks for the comment by the way.
Any criticism on the artwork itself?
F.Y.I The link i posted contains an updated version of my design

Can't beleive you man, wtf

You ripping someone's work !!

being inspired doesn't mean to copycat

I feel bad that i thought this was some original work, get your own ideas.

it's an homage. not a rip. nothing wrong with that.

critique the work all day if you want, but this is not a rip.

well he should have said it was a Homage in the first place, gave me the damn wrong impression thinking he thought up the whole concept.

I agree with what Anthony Smith said, shits too damn close to the original.

that shit cray
Anthony Smith said about 11 months ago

Just to be clear, definitely not calling it a rip. Its clear what it is, its clear what its referencing (or at least it should be....brush up on your art history xic) . I just think if you are going to pay homage to an iconic piece of work you have to add something significant of your own.
WXGFX said about 11 months ago

Sorry Xic, i didn't mean to mislead at all. I did post 'inspired by Rene Magritte’s ‘The Son of Man’ with the submission every time and tried to make it clear. When i first drew this i actually didn't have the apple in the image

but i felt that it then lost any part of it being an homage and was more of an original illustration but also one that was far less interesting..
Melgar said about 11 months ago

Uhm, rejected.

How do I improve this?

details

Sorry for the crappy mock.

Denimous Snake said about 11 months ago

For starters, why are those webs important to the design exactly?
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