Official Critiques wanted post.

Posted March 1st, 2011 by quakerninja

Do post shirts you want to have fixed.
Don't post shirts that took you no time or thought.

I can't help you if you have no understanding of what I am going to tell you.
Please have a basic understanding of the fundamentals and a willingness to accept criticism and the self motivation to take that information and improve yourself.

This is not a post to do your work for you and they are just opinions so please don't get butt hurt.
Also share and share alike please. No leaches. If you have something of value to add don't clam up we all have things we are really good at and things that we suck at.

Do describe what you are trying to get across and what you think the problem might be in your own words. I can't read your mind.
Don't just flood this place with crap and expect to get better. Your going to have to do all the hard parts on your own. All I can do is point out some technical mistakes and suggest improvements.

3578 Comments

Somaon said about 11 months ago

Don't know if this is the 3rd or 4th try wit this one and trying to fix it. Is there any hope at all with this one or I'm being hardheaded and just give up on this one, let me know what you guys think.
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

As a music maker, I idolize vinyl, as I am sure a lot of other music makers do as well. With out them I would not be able to hear a lot of my favorite songs, not everyone feels the same, so the vinyl is an "Uncommon Idol". Any feedback would be great thanks.
WinterArtwork said about 10 months ago

can't tell if this is a good idea or just dumb...thoughts?
Somaon said about 10 months ago

jamelbeckham said:
As a music maker, I idolize vinyl, as I am sure a lot of other music makers do as well. With out them I would not be able to hear a lot of my favorite songs, not everyone feels the same, so the vinyl is an "Uncommon Idol". Any feedback would be great thanks.

Love the idea just think it looks like a black rainbow.
Somaon said about 10 months ago

WinterArtwork said:can't tell if this is a good idea or just dumb...thoughts?

I don't think it's really original, same ol' stuff. Over all super clean and got skills.
DanielAndHisArt said about 10 months ago

Somaon said:Don't know if this is the 3rd or 4th try wit this one and trying to fix it. Is there any hope at all with this one or I'm being hardheaded and just give up on this one, let me know what you guys think.

It still looks like it is in a sketch stage to me.

Those lines are really rough. I think it would look a lot better if you didnt have the whole sketchy look to it and really took the time to draw every line as perfect as you could.

I was trying to find pictures of hair online and i saw this -

I think your best bet to make this look great it starting with the perspective first in your sketch (which looks ok now i think) and then going over that sketch and trying to make the hair actually look like hair as well as making the linework better. See in the sketch how you can actually see the curls/highlights?

Sometimes, less is more. And dont copy this Jeff Finley tutorial/picture exactly, but he has a pretty neat technique for drawing hair also. Simple lines with shadows that make the hair stand out and "flow".
WinterArtwork said about 11 months ago

Somaon said:
WinterArtwork said:can't tell if this is a good idea or just dumb...thoughts?

I don't think it's really original, same ol' stuff. Over all super clean and got skills.

how is it unoriginal in your opinion?
Eureka!!! said about 11 months ago

Thinking of going in a new direction with the company. let me know what you think. PSH WÃœD
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

Somaon said:
jamelbeckham said:
As a music maker, I idolize vinyl, as I am sure a lot of other music makers do as well. With out them I would not be able to hear a lot of my favorite songs, not everyone feels the same, so the vinyl is an "Uncommon Idol". Any feedback would be great thanks.

Love the idea just think it looks like a black rainbow.

Any advice so it does not look like a rainbow?
Joshua Jordan said about 11 months ago

WinterArtwork said:
Somaon said:
WinterArtwork said:can't tell if this is a good idea or just dumb...thoughts?

I don't think it's really original, same ol' stuff. Over all super clean and got skills.

how is it unoriginal in your opinion?

Good idea. Good execution.
Love Sick said about 11 months ago

agree with josh^
seventhfury said about 11 months ago

Howdy all! Wondering if someone can give a little insight into what I might need to fix with my submissions to get them approved. I get rejected almost all the time and though I'm constantly refining my work I'm a bit baffled that not one of these latest designs made the cut. I wish that after X rejections we could just get some small insight into what we're doing wrong, but I know what it's like to run a small business and I don't fault the Mintees crew for this.

That said, anyone have any thoughts/ideas/input?

Thanks much!
Somaon said about 11 months ago

DanielAndHisArt said:
Somaon said:Don't know if this is the 3rd or 4th try wit this one and trying to fix it. Is there any hope at all with this one or I'm being hardheaded and just give up on this one, let me know what you guys think.

It still looks like it is in a sketch stage to me.

Those lines are really rough. I think it would look a lot better if you didnt have the whole sketchy look to it and really took the time to draw every line as perfect as you could.

I was trying to find pictures of hair online and i saw this -

I think your best bet to make this look great it starting with the perspective first in your sketch (which looks ok now i think) and then going over that sketch and trying to make the hair actually look like hair as well as making the linework better. See in the sketch how you can actually see the curls/highlights?

Sometimes, less is more. And dont copy this Jeff Finley tutorial/picture exactly, but he has a pretty neat technique for drawing hair also. Simple lines with shadows that make the hair stand out and "flow".

Thank you will do the hair all over, appreciate your comments.
Somaon said about 11 months ago

WinterArtwork said:
Somaon said:
WinterArtwork said:can't tell if this is a good idea or just dumb...thoughts?

I don't think it's really original, same ol' stuff. Over all super clean and got skills.

how is it unoriginal in your opinion?

My opinion, just think it looks like the same ol' presidential posters or something that you've seen before maybe it's just the colors. Then again you have others that love it, so in the end I'm just giving my opinion.
Streetcorner said about 11 months ago

^ I think it's a clever idea. I personally have not seen any campaign posters with "unavailable" images.
WinterArtwork said about 11 months ago

Somaon I wasn't offended or anything just wanted to know your reasons...thanks for the honest critiques guys!
Somaon said about 10 months ago

WinterArtwork said:Somaon I wasn't offended or anything just wanted to know your reasons...thanks for the honest critiques guys!

No problem bro you go great feed back and obviously a lot of potential keep it going man.
seventhfury said about 11 months ago

Nicki F.U. said:
seventhfury said:Howdy all! Wondering if someone can give a little insight into what I might need to fix with my submissions to get them approved. I get rejected almost all the time and though I'm constantly refining my work I'm a bit baffled that not one of these latest designs made the cut. I wish that after X rejections we could just get some small insight into what we're doing wrong, but I know what it's like to run a small business and I don't fault the Mintees crew for this.

That said, anyone have any thoughts/ideas/input?!

I like your tees :) Since I get rejected also I'm probably the wrong guy to give any critiques, but maybe it has to do with the concept? No offense man. Like I said, I personally like your stuff. Animals acting like humans is a well known concept and I can see the humour in an alligator drinking a glass of wine. But maybe your animals should go a little bit more crazy, for example like this gremlin: http://mintees.com/tees/344461-spike-disturbia-clothing
But like I said I'm in the same situation like you ;)
Good luck!

Thanks for the response Nicki! I think the thing for me is that all three of these are quite a bit different from each other and I was hoping at least one would make it through. Good luck to you as well!
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

Statistically speaking, 10 out of 10 kids who learn how to use an MPC are more likely to graduate high school at the top of their class, and go to college. These kids will also understand the difference between fake and real hip hop. We need to teach the youth for a better tomorrow. (any feedback would be great, I really want this design to stand out, thanks)
Somaon said about 11 months ago

jamelbeckham said:

Statistically speaking, 10 out of 10 kids who learn how to use an MPC are more likely to graduate high school at the top of their class, and go to college. These kids will also understand the difference between fake and real hip hop. We need to teach the youth for a better tomorrow. (any feedback would be great, I really want this design to stand out, thanks)

Love the message, as a huge hip hop head I can appreciate the message.
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

Somaon said:
jamelbeckham said:

Statistically speaking, 10 out of 10 kids who learn how to use an MPC are more likely to graduate high school at the top of their class, and go to college. These kids will also understand the difference between fake and real hip hop. We need to teach the youth for a better tomorrow. (any feedback would be great, I really want this design to stand out, thanks)

Love the message, as a huge hip hop head I can appreciate the message.

Thank you, I thought I would exaggerate on it a little, thanks though.
cmeyers said about 11 months ago

jamelbeckham said:

Statistically speaking, 10 out of 10 kids who learn how to use an MPC are more likely to graduate high school at the top of their class, and go to college. These kids will also understand the difference between fake and real hip hop. We need to teach the youth for a better tomorrow. (any feedback would be great, I really want this design to stand out, thanks)

statistic is extremely misleading. you're saying that 100% of every student should learn how to use this and that it will cause them to get better grades. that is not true. wherever you got that from did not conduct a proper study. but whatever, the shirt design needs work. the arches don't line up and the typography is bland and sloppy.

i also feel like this is saying that all youth need to listen to and learn about hip hop. i love hip hop but don't think that everyone needs to listen to it. there is other "dope music" than hip hop.

i see what you're trying to say, i just think it needs to be refined.
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

cmeyers said:
jamelbeckham said:

Statistically speaking, 10 out of 10 kids who learn how to use an MPC are more likely to graduate high school at the top of their class, and go to college. These kids will also understand the difference between fake and real hip hop. We need to teach the youth for a better tomorrow. (any feedback would be great, I really want this design to stand out, thanks)

statistic is extremely misleading. you're saying that 100% of every student should learn how to use this and that it will cause them to get better grades. that is not true. wherever you got that from did not conduct a proper study. but whatever, the shirt design needs work. the arches don't line up and the typography is bland and sloppy.

i also feel like this is saying that all youth need to listen to and learn about hip hop. i love hip hop but don't think that everyone needs to listen to it. there is other "dope music" than hip hop.

i see what you're trying to say, i just think it needs to be refined.

Lol the statistics are fake lol I made them up, calm down, thanks for the advice though
DieHard said about 11 months ago

Two Headed Hydra said:
sonar said:
Somaon said:
Two Headed Hydra said:My Latest Design was rejected.. Any thoughts guys? any suggestions about mock up?? Thank you all!

Here's the lineart:

Bro I think its super dope! don't have an ides why it wasn't a go.

it looks like the electric zombie shirt same cool scheme, apart from that you've got skills dude but the text completely ruins it

Thanks bro! i will work on the text!:D

I think its great. I often get confused here by the decisions made which print is approved and which is not. Like ... if your typo is bad then what is this ? http://mintees.com/tees/353753-we-design-worlds and it got approved. .. jeah I know Im gonna be hated but sorry ...
DieHard said about 11 months ago

jamelbeckham said:
Somaon said:
jamelbeckham said:
As a music maker, I idolize vinyl, as I am sure a lot of other music makers do as well. With out them I would not be able to hear a lot of my favorite songs, not everyone feels the same, so the vinyl is an "Uncommon Idol". Any feedback would be great thanks.

Love the idea just think it looks like a black rainbow.

Any advice so it does not look like a rainbow?

add more lines,
http://www.shopbenchmark.com/media/catalog/product/cache/34/image/5e06319eda06f020e43594a9c230972d/c/o/copeland_record.jp
work on the ribbon bit
maybe could add some texture ?
and use some more "attractive" font :) hehe good luck with it buddy.
DieHard said about 11 months ago

ChrisNeal said:
JEngerbret said:Would love some input. Thanks!

I'm into this, but I'd clear up the grey areas on the outside of the lines, and broaden the wrist/arm a little.

Not sure how I'm feeling about this, any advise would be sweet.

:D:D that cat is awesome man :D
as it was said. work on the txt typo
the illustration is cool for me, but what abou to try remove the second eye coming out from skull
and leave it as a hole and put there worm or something :D just thinkin loud.
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

DieHard said:
jamelbeckham said:
Somaon said:
jamelbeckham said:
As a music maker, I idolize vinyl, as I am sure a lot of other music makers do as well. With out them I would not be able to hear a lot of my favorite songs, not everyone feels the same, so the vinyl is an "Uncommon Idol". Any feedback would be great thanks.

Love the idea just think it looks like a black rainbow.

Any advice so it does not look like a rainbow?

add more lines,
http://www.shopbenchmark.com/media/catalog/product/cache/34/image/5e06319eda06f020e43594a9c230972d/c/o/copeland_record.jp
work on the ribbon bit
maybe could add some texture ?
and use some more "attractive" font :) hehe good luck with it buddy.

Thanks for the advice I have been looking up texture tutorials, i'm noticing a lot of my designs are flat and boring, so maybe the textures can help.
Two Headed Hydra said about 10 months ago

Any sugestions?? Thank you all!
jamelbeckham said about 10 months ago

Learning how to use textures and brushes, any advice on the design would be great, thanks.
Dzul Alerion said about 11 months ago

I'm actually trying to build my portfolio. So here's one of my own personal work. Any comments or what went wrong?

Link to my portfolio: http://cargocollective.com/dzuldesigns
DieHard said about 11 months ago

jamelbeckham said:

Learning how to use textures and brushes, any advice on the design would be great, thanks.

the typo looks good for me, but im not sure about the shape down there. is it a calculator? :D
DieHard said about 11 months ago

Two Headed Hydra said:

Any sugestions?? Thank you all!

broootal man!
jamelbeckham said about 11 months ago

DieHard said:
jamelbeckham said:

Learning how to use textures and brushes, any advice on the design would be great, thanks.

the typo looks good for me, but im not sure about the shape down there. is it a calculator? :D

Ha thanks I appreciate the comment. Its an mpc the image is
deadoctopi said about 11 months ago

Dzul Alerion said:I'm actually trying to build my portfolio. So here's one of my own personal work. Any comments or what went wrong?

Link to my portfolio: http://cargocollective.com/dzuldesigns

I'm terrible at typography. So take this with a grain of salt. This looks rushed. Your white reflections are not following the same rule all over the word FUCK. It's "missing" highlights in some places. The big blue stroke outline looks rigid against the smooth shape of the text. It just seems rushed all over.

I'd go over it again, if FUCK is going to have that hand drawn look, try applying that look to the rest of the design. Mixing clean/solid lines and hand drawn is a finesse game, and sometimes it doesn't work. This is one of those times.

Keep poking at the design, make it "blend" together.
Joe Dirt said about 10 months ago

^^the rose on the right should be smaller than the one in the foreground
William Henry said about 10 months ago

Two Headed Hydra said:

Any sugestions?? Thank you all!

Why is the top and left of the skull cut off? Why didn't you draw the whole thing?
WinterArtwork said about 11 months ago

thoughts?
JoeWSE said about 11 months ago

Wondering why this got rejected.
William Henry said about 11 months ago

JoeWSE said:

Wondering why this got rejected.

Theres just not much to it. Theres nothing that sets it apart from other similar designs. Its not bad, its just kind of bland.

Matt Borchert said about 11 months ago

Dzul Alerion said:I'm actually trying to build my portfolio. So here's one of my own personal work. Any comments or what went wrong?

Link to my portfolio: http://cargocollective.com/dzuldesigns

You're trying to build your portfolio so you use the word "Fuck"? Professional design shops won't find that too clever. That and the type doesn't have any flow...keep working.
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